Good.
This needs some polishing, so lets get started.
- Get rid of those traced bitmaps
- When characters talk, give them a mouth, or just do something else other than moving his head. I know he's wearing a mask, but you gotta' be creative.
- Those background sounds are too loud and interfere with the voices, make them quieter.
- Less black, it makes it less attractive.
Other than that, I say thumbs up! Great logo at the start!
Ill keep that in mind. thanks.
Great work!
That was great, it's good to see some people who actually try to produce quality character animation. Those blurry scenes with the lack of detail were crappy, I'd change um. Other than that, the story was great, and I loved it!
thumidy uppidy.
Gladily tha u likely!
Needs polishing...
Hey frozensheep, nice to see you finished it up. It was pretty good, but lots of things wrong.
BAD:
- The animation wasn't fluid - too choppy - and it had too much tweening.
- The sound quality was too low.
- The use of traced bitmaps was bad
- Some scenes were much better than others.
- Bad back button at the end / ending screen
GOOD:
- Some animation was par
- Funny stuff
- Pretty good length
Good job, but could be better.
thanks for the tip about the back button.
Wow!
I've seen that done before with stickmen but this is totally innovative! That was great! Such a good idea, and I havn't really ever seen anything like it!
Wee! That was cool!
Thanks a lot :)
Dude...
If you didn't make it don't submit it! That means it is stolen.
no, not stolen, he was there when i put it on and i had full permission from it.
WHO THE HELL DO YOU THINK I AM?
That wasn't right.
Tracing weapons isn't okay. Just tracing everything shows no artistic talent, and makes for very, very bad movies / games.
Teaching people to trace is like teaching people to steal and should not be in a tutorial.
i guess, i'm just trying to stop people from drawing crap weapons like i have seen in so many movies before
That sure was original...
...I have never seen anything like it! Truely genious...
You used a total of two colours - black and white. Very well thought out.
You animated a 'fbf' movie using a low fps (12?).
You submitted a crappy entry that was only worked on for a laughable 6 hours.
Your entry was disgracful - 'fbf advanced'. Wtf is that?! FBF isn't just some meaningless paintbrush strokes on a white canvas. No. FBF is oldschool animation. Watch some Buggs Bunny, thats FBF. You create a character, write a story, and animate such movements as opening a door by drawing the first and last frames and filling in the inbetweens.
That is just terrible. Do not ever submit anything similar to that ever again.
Nice Sarcasm In the Beggining...
I think...
and I will remmeber to do better...
Mouthing!!
Wonchop, Wonchop, Wonchop... don't be lazy. Do propor lip sync. It would make it so much better.
Also, though hard to animate, at least make an attempt to show the fight insteas of a white screen with text. I know its supposed to be funny but hell, a fight scene'd be much funnier - worth the Hard Work!
Also, it may be your style but i'd say stay away from pictures - like photos - and also get a lil better range of movement.
Like I said, I had 2 days to do this. Plus my computer was being stupid.
This was just some silly thing for my friends birthday. Proper lip sync is probably best saved for the longer stuff.
Review by Stevie -
This movie really dissapointed me. The graphics style was amazing, just amazing, but what plummeted your score was the fact that it small slow-paced, boring, with little humour.
Graphics (9): Great, just great. It was amazing, but it seemed to be the only thing that was acually good.
Style (7): Probably should be a 6, but since the graphics were SO good I had to do it. I found the lack of colour, length and overall flow to be down-right adverage.
Sound (5): Ugh, this dissapointed me. If you had some good voice actors, not some humorless chums, this'd be better. The cell-phone music and quality was good, but it was SO BORING! Get some younger voice actors to lighten it up, or get a better writer.
Voilence (5): Very little, not like it really is that important. To be honest, violence is more of a Newgrounds-type rating, because lots of people enjoy it. I do, but it is not an important category. Anyway, it was okay.
Interactivity (n/a): This I didn't rate, because it was not a game, and it had very little interactivity.
Humor (1): This, and sound could improve, as well as maybe some interactivity (but that is optional). Pf, this was just crap. Humor is important, if you are TRYING TO MAKE A FUNNY MOVIE! It was the opposite of humor, and that killed your mark.
Overall, do not be dissapointed. I will never forget the graphics quality of this feature, because it was awesome! You lacked in other areas... no big deal.
Also, I would really appreciate a respond, please!
- Stevie
Hey thanks for the critique. I appreicatte that kind of review over the kind that just bash the work. I will definitly work on improving my weaknesses in the future. I feel like we've improved with every short and we plan to keep moving on like that.
Quite enjoyable
It would be better if it showed how the female worm was feeling as well.
I didn't like the style of animation, but I'm glad that you used an outline (because people who don't usually aren't very good. It is just an easy way out) and the FBF was very good, but I found the backgrounds hlaf-assed (really, no offence) and the characters a bit too simple.
The music choice was a quality one, and it ran smooth! Also, the plot was okay.
THUMBS UP! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!
Really thought the backgrounds were bad? Even the flowers? I know the beginning looked a little rough...but once the beach scene hit I thought it looked good. Thanks for the honest review though! Oh yeah, if outline means storyboard, then yeah, I do that for all my cartoons. If it means outline characters...uhh..I do that for all of them too, I always thought it looks nicer, and means you put more effort into it.
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